The great hills of the earth
Tower over the horizon
I stare at this image
It captures my mind
And my soul
And I wonder how they got there
And how they were formed
And I wonder what's on top
And what's below
And I let my mind wander
To and fro
The clouds sweep over the very tip
Birds flying within the valleys
Up so high
I can no longer see them
Gone
Just like that
In an instant
Could happen to anyone
At any moment
For that is why I stare
At these large blocks of rock
I must not take advantage of life
For one day it could disappear
Gone
Just like that
In an instant
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ReplyDeleteI liked how much rythem it had, without sounding at all corny. You also used repitition to create meanings, which was awesome.
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ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading your poem. I like the way you used repitition with different words. Also, the way you say: "Gone", gives this poem a realistic sound to it--so it does not seem completely romanticized.
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