Deep current pushes slowly
Massive weight against stones
Crashing over obstacles
There is no stopping it
The clear blue water
Flows peacefully
Throughout the banks
How beautiful and wonderful
Is this creation
The rushing of the stream
Over everything beneath it
Frogs swim below
This is their river
Their safety net
Their home
The river rushes
Until it hits the edge
Where it transforms,
Even more miraculous
A waterfall
I like this piece but I think after our conversation I am really looking forward to the next draft.
ReplyDeleteI am so excited about this poem. It has a really sophisticated read. The symbols now totally work for me, and honestly, I'm proud to be your teacher. Thanks.
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